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In response to
the vile reflux you
endure
I seek to be lost, of
the villain.
The inconsiderate
obnoxious and toxic tendencies
you possess
    (viva voce)
repulse your peers
and turn me
away.
So quickly
    (dazzled)
was I by hate
that the parapet
closes down
on my
tender fibres.

The one day
I open
    (the door)
to the outside
tissue paper world
the stout presence
of your spite
in my eyes
is missing.
How much
it consumed of me
is unknown
and pitiful.

By the tick of my watch
you're
the vinegar I tasted
as a toddler
and I hobble
grinning
as daft as a duck

for another
lovely thing
to approach my
handspan of a life.
Though I've never experienced such a feeling, I have had some dreams where I was the subject of someone's hate haha
I appreciate your constructive feedback and thoughts!

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Slashh-20000 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2017
nice
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PeriodicFable Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2017   Writer
Thank you.
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Slashh-20000 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2017
welcome mr fable 
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AlpinusTheFox Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Great work as always fable! I like the last lines a lot <3
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PeriodicFable Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2017   Writer
Thank you, I'm so happy to hear that! Hug 
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